“I don’t know,” Sophie instinctively reached up and tugged an eyelash free. “I think it’s because my parents are unknown.” She put her hand to the necklace he had given her. “But it doesn’t matter. Look at Juline and Kelser, they’re fine!”
“But, it’s a bad match,” Fitz pointed out.
“So?” The conversation was making Sophie more and more nervous, she was sure she wouldn’t have any eyelashes left after they were done.
“I can’t… I’m a Vacker.” Fitz said.
Sophie felt like her throat was closing up, “You… you care more about your heritage? Your status? Then me?”
“I can’t, not after Alvar,” Fitz stuttered. “My family.”
Sophie’s eyes filled with tears. “Then,” the tears rolled down her face, as she reached behind her hair, and unclipped the necklace. “Then I guess we’re done.” Sophie handed him the necklace. She spun on her heels, heading for Everglen’s gates.
“No! Sophie! Wait!” Sophie heard Fitz’s voice behind her.
She pushed open the gates.
Sophie saw that Fitz had made no attempt to follow her, she pulled out her home crystal, and light leaped away.
I was supposed to be sleeping, and as I was trying to fall asleep, the entire story was coming together in my head, and I was like OK I NEED TO WRITE THIS DOWN BEFORE I FORGOT IT. XD Also, thank you. I read a lot, so I think I have a way with words. *dances out of the room*
DUDE SHANNON MESSENGER BETTER SEE THIS AND USE IT. BECAUSE IT. IS. AMAZING. KEEFE CALLED HER BY HER FIRST NAME LIKE THAT WAS SO SWEET!!! AND YOU EVEN KEPT IT IN THERE THAT HE TEASED HER LIKE NORMAL AND HE STUTTERED WHEN HE WAS EMBARRASSED!! PERFECT!! I mean I don't think Sophie would have had enough courage to kiss him right away but she DEFINITELY would have known that she had always lived him from the heart and Fitz from the mind!!!!!!
18.104.22.168 wrote: DUDE SHANNON MESSENGER BETTER SEE THIS AND USE IT. BECAUSE IT. IS. AMAZING. KEEFE CALLED HER BY HER FIRST NAME LIKE THAT WAS SO SWEET!!! AND YOU EVEN KEPT IT IN THERE THAT HE TEASED HER LIKE NORMAL AND HE STUTTERED WHEN HE WAS EMBARRASSED!! PERFECT!! I mean I don't think Sophie would have had enough courage to kiss him right away but she DEFINITELY would have known that she had always lived him from the heart and Fitz from the mind!!!!!!
-Katnip (Neveah K)
THANKS YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. I know, but it was meant to be a short story, so I was just trying to speed it up a bit.
This is really good ! also @Chewbacca you should ! I love fanfics and I need more of them and it's also good practice on writing to write a fanfic since people will read it and give criticism and stuff so you can get better.
Hello, I'm here to judge your fanfic. I have checked your grammar errors and only found one, and that one was, woah, whoah. That's my only complaint. All right, time to give you your score, and it is, out of 10 a 9.9! I have you continue to write, and have a great day! Sincerely, Lydia (DIA).
I would disagree. She's an amazing writer!!!!! And if she isn't going to continue the story, we need to respect her wishes and stop pushing. It's her story, so she gets to chose how long it is and if she continues.
Wow that’s an amazing story. (XD better than most people can write) And, just saying, it’s okay if you don’t want to keep writing. Honestly, I think this is enough to impress a lot of people. So great job!
I'm sorry for being rude. It's just that, that was a really great story. So can you forgive me, FangirlingSoHard????? Please. That was a amazing story. You are a wonderful and cool author, so forgive me please!!!!!!!!!! Thank you. I wo'nt be rude to you ever again. I'm not even a rude person if your friends with me.
Chloe, thank you so much for really liking my story, but I stated three times that I won't be writing anymore, and even the title indicates that it was always meant to be a short story. I might write something else after reading Legacy, or I might even rewrite this, but please guys, don't ask me to write more on this. It's making me feel guilty like I need to write more, when I'm happy where it is. When you've got something how you want it, you don't keep going because it might get messed up. Thank you to everyone who appreciated my story, and to those who were fine with it being left as a short story.
I know!!!! It's fine if you don't want to write anymore. Sorry fro all of us pressuring you!!!!!!!!! Did you forgivr me yet fro how rude i was being to you??????? You are a great writer no matter what. I'm cheering you on even though I don't know you. Good job. We won't ask for anymore if you don't want us to. Please reply back soon if you frogave more for being rude. 🙂