Tell she pulled away. "Sorry" Nigini told him quietly looking away embassesd. Wave said "no need" as someone cleared their throat. They turned to see......no it couldn't be......
"Hearth?"Nigini said faintly. Then she did something anyone would do if their lost love came back from the dead. She fainted.
Hearth POV
( it's still the same chapter)
Rrrr Hearth thought that guy thinks since he had died he could take his girlfriend. Hearth saw that guy corner his poor love and kiss her. On the lips!
He saw he eyes wide open in suprise so that ment she didn't love him. Did she? He turned away. So he didn't see her close her eyes and kiss Wave back. Then Nigini fainted. The other boy caught her.
"WHO ARE YOU?! AND WHY ARE YOU TRYING TO MAKE OUT WITH MY GIRLFRIEND?!" Hearth shouted. "My name is Wave. And wernt you dead. You left her, you left her open!" Wave said.
Hearth came over to Wave and took Nigini from his arms gentle cradling her. He saw something shiny on her and he looked at it. It was the necklace he'd given to her. Then he saw a ring on her finger and a bracelet on her wrist. Hearth went pale.
"Who gave her this ring?" Hearth asked. "Her brother Keefe" Wave said. "Oh what about the bracelet?" Hearth asked "Fitz" wave said "is he another brother?" Hearth asked. "No wanna-be-boyfriend" Wave said bitterness in his tone.
Then a blonde haired boy with ice blue eyes came running up to tjem. Behind him was a blonde girl with brown eyes. "Why are you holding my sister?" The boy probably Keefe asked.
"Nice to meet you Keefe my name is Hearth"
That's gonna be so awkward for Nigini!
Chapter fithteen
Dedicated to Vice Pres. Of the Keefe Fan Club
Hi Goldswan I just read your fanfic and i really like it. However here are a few this you should work on:
-Start a new paragraph everytime someone else speaks.
-Check spelling and add comma's more
-Remember that Elves don't usually have more that one power because making someone too overpowered would mess up the plot (as much as I want someone to have two or three powers :)
-Be a little more clear with your typing
-Remember that Sophie's goal is to take down the Neverseen, so I'm not totally sure when this fanfic takes place or wether it takes place before or after they take down the Neverseen.
-Try to have the characters motives be a little more clear so that their actions aren't so sudden.
-I not comepletely sure of how Sophie met Nigini or if she new her already.
Again I love love love this fanfic and I'm excided to see where you go with this. I love the characters that you've made and your ideas for KOTLC are fun and exciting. I'll try to get others to read this.
yay! I love it!
It is sooo good ~ sokeefe fluff
Nigini woke up in her bed with Keefe staring at her. "Keeeeefffffeee,why are you staring at me?" "Im hurt" "huh,what do mean" "you told Wave who Hearth was before mmmeee! Your brother!" Keefe said with hurt look on his face.
Nigini got out from under the covers and came over to him. She leaned against him and said "I'm sorry, it's hard being somewhere new,and you where acting so protective over me with boys.....and I didn't know what you would say. I was scared" she told him. "It's fine I guess I was a little hurt" he said
"Well to be fair I herd that you have done the great gulon incident" Nigini said punching him playfuly "hey,Nigini who are you going to chose" Keefe asked. "Uuuuuuhhhhhggggg" Nigini said rolling on her bed. Then she acadently rolled off the edge. She yelped in suprise. Keefe laughed and said "now I see why they like you so much"
'I'll make you a deal" Nigini said getting back on her bed. "I'm listening" Keefe said. "OK you tell Sophie how you feel about her" Nigini said "and what's in it for me?" He asked " you can help me chose" she finished. "Ugh Sophie's so lucky" Nigini grumbled.
"Have you seen how clumsy I am" Sophie said coming in the room. "Hi Sophie, did Keefe invite you?" Nigini asked her.
"No I came to check on you, and why did you say I'm lucky?" Sophie asked "boys, your oblivious,and I actually know that boys are fighting over me" Nigini grumbled getting up. She went to the door.
"What do you mean?" Sophie asked. "I'll leave you two alone" Nigini said going out the door. But before she closed the door she winked at Keefe.
Nigini closed the door and she herd Sophie say "Keefe Sercen tell me what's going on" then she walked away.
She walked into the forest. It didn't remind her of Wave like the ocean did. She was walking deeper into the forest.
Then she saw something shiny. It was a flower. It was beatiful. It had white petals and seagreen middle where the pollen was stored.
She took some pollen and put in her bracelet. Then on the bracelet three words popped up.
Nigini gasped.
The flower was called.
The Nigini flower!