Board Thread:Clubs/@comment-44390494-20200109205641/@comment-38207171-20200116215708

Okay, I recommend diving your poem into stanzas. Stanzas help to show complete thoughts and make reading the poem easier. Though, you don't have to, I find that dividing into stanzas is a good way to show meter (the rhythm of a poem) and separating it to make it cleaner and easier to read. That's just my opinion of course; free verse doesn't need to have that. I can do an example of the divisions with your poem if you'd like.

Content wise, I quite like the idea, it's very good.