Board Thread:Clubs/@comment-44390494-20191206064730/@comment-44390494-20200101203817

SoKeepherOfTheLostCities wrote: Ooh, the topic sounds good! You did switch up tenses though. Your passage is in past-tense, while "He was wearing..." is in present-participle. A hard thing to get, but the correct word would be 'wore.' I'd also recommend more description about the boy. "He was wearing a green t-shirt, khaki shorts, and grey sneakers" just sounds bland. Try describing the color, how he looked in it, etc. Hey hey hey, hold up. You can still say 'he was wearing,' because the 'was' turns the verb into past tense.