User blog comment:Aspen the leafwing-rainwing-sandwing tribrid/Regrets and Rewrites/@comment-37589255-20190324054932

Nice job! The only suggestion I have is to maybe explain the flashback of how Biana and Marella broke up in a story way instead of recounting. Like instead of just stating what happened, say things such as:

Marella had snapped, "I'm not surprised you're looking for other options Biana."

"I'm not," Biana had protested, etc.

But of course, if you feel like this would ruin the focus of the story, you should continue the way you have done it. I'm excited to see more!