Thread:SilverStar4758/@comment-39634324-20200102203557/@comment-39634324-20200106124213

It’s really good so far! Here are my glows and grows: Glows:
 * Your voice and style is developed, and I can see where you got inspiration for it.
 * It’s very hard working with characters another person wrote. You did it well, so good job!
 * Storyline

Grows:
 * Formatting. I can make a guide for you, if you want!
 * Punctuation. There are some really long sections that would benefit from a few commas. Rule of thumb: Let’s eat, Grandma! Is not the same as Let’s eat Grandma.