Board Thread:Clubs/@comment-44390494-20191206064730/@comment-44044902-20200101193928

Ooh, the topic sounds good! You did switch up tenses though. Your whole story is in past-tense, while "He was wearing..." is in present-participle. A hard thing to get, but the correct word would be 'wore.' I'd also recommend more description about the boy. "He was wearing a green t-shirt, khaki shorts, and grey sneakers" just sounds bland. Try describing the color, how he looked in it, etc.