Board Thread:News and Announcements/@comment-38918140-20191013042129/@comment-43432691-20200104220804

@anothercrazedfangirl

i have some questioins, i hope you don't mind. im not trying to be rude or make you feel bad. im sorry if i am. if i do, ill just shut up, ok?

1. why are all the songs at the end?

- a musical has songs playing throuought, their are not just all at the end. maybe you are going to put them through for the actual thing, you just pt them at the end, but it doesn't look like that. im sorry.

2.why is there an awkward pause after they all enter Tam's house?

- they all just enter tams house and thats. it no more diolog.

3. could you please add in more types of music?

- I like them, but if all of the songs are soft and slow, that gets kind of boring after a bit. maybe you could add in more different types of music, you dont have to get ri of them all, but maybe add in more of a wider range of music generas. one of the reasons hamilton is so sucessflul is becase of all the different styles of music. maybe you can do the same. add more happy, upbeat songs. angry and bold songs for sophies argument with fitz. celebratory songs for when keefe is healed. add in ( you dont need to add ALL of these, just a few.) rap, hip hop, country, pop, alternative rock, belting beutiful songs. ( there REALLY needs to be more belting)

4. could you add in more lovey-dovey stuff in the script?

- for people who are married, they don't really seem "in love". you will probably fix that in the animation, but maybe add in some "i love yous" in the script?

5. some songs don't make sense

- i like the songs, but what does new year have to do with anything? was it close to new years and they were planning a party? if you REALLY dont want to cut some songs out that do't make sense, can you make them recurr in the diolog multiple times so it makes sense. because this whole thing happens and suddenly they start singing a soft song about new years. it will make people confused. im not saying make ALL the songs related

6. maybe add in some happy little scenes for no reason?

- ok, so i just told you to cut random songs out because they are too random, so who am I to tell you to add in ramdom scenes? What im saying is you should add in some scens to make people smile. they should be kind of random, but at least still make sense. the key is transitions (ta daaa!) random scenes should be at least related. don't have lihn suddenly come in and start singing about puppies. but if you like that idea, then you can have lihn hear that sophie is going to heal keefe and then lihn wants to get him a present. finally she settles on getting him a puppy and sings a song about that. random, but related. im not saying you need to add that scene, that was jus an example of a happy random but related scene.

7. more minor subplots

- it will make random but related HAPPY scenes easier. for example if you want there to be a new years party, make it a subplot. tht way, it will make sense in the script, and we get more happy randome but related scenes.

8. more screen time for other charecters?

- your story is great, but we would love to see more lihn and marella and the rest of them you cold add them in too. give them solo's or something.

9. an opening number and finale?

- i was hoping you could have a happy energtic song at the beggining, or a bold angry song for killing gisela ( it depends on where you want it to be. angry and firey for gisela, and happy for if you want it to be biana and dex) fr the finally, since its a victorius ending, th finsly should be upbeat and shocase victory

10. shouldn't when sophie finds out she is i love with keefe, tell fitz abut her feelings?

again, im sorry if i made you feel bad. i wasn't trying to. im not saying you did a bad job, you did exellent! i just want to help you make it even better. if this was too much, im sorry, ill shut up.