Board Thread:Short Stories and Fanfictions/@comment-44987522-20200205015429/@comment-104.1.154.140-20200208163358

That last sentence is so great tho...

But most of that... ULTIMATE BETRAYAL!!!!!!!!! Which Forkle is that? I can't imagine either of them calling Sophie a freak... And the ' Human Abolishment and Enslavement Project'?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

I dunno... It's really good, don't get me wrong, but good luck with having Forkle explain his way out of that one!!! I don't know where the story will lead, which is my only problem.

Please don't take offense!!! I trying to do... What's it called? Respectful Critism, Kind Critism, Creative Critism...??? You know what I mean.

I loved you're Great Gulon Incident, though!!!

~Eleda