Board Thread:Short Stories and Fanfictions/@comment-2600:1702:1AF0:6630:19B5:FF16:CADF:1A4E-20191018142136/@comment-44044902-20191018143637

Ooh, I like it :D Just a tip: it gets a bit confusing with the dialogue like that; try spacing it out with a new paragraph. Other then that, I can't wait til the next chapter