Board Thread:Clubs/@comment-2600:8807:1C01:A199:8173:1152:E311:493A-20191228085735/@comment-44390494-20191230081431

1. "What the-" Percy started to say.

The proper use of the Em Dash is really important.

2. "Shh'''!" S'''he whispered.

I would also had used 'hissed' instead of 'whispered.'

3. "I will check the rest here," Percy said now whispering, "You can check upstairs, holler if you see anything."

She either didn't realize it was a coma or just forgot to not capitalize.

Why am I acting critique-like right now? . ..