Board Thread:Clubs/@comment-44390494-20200109205641/@comment-44390494-20200128050204

OK, first question: what time-line of the world does the story develop at?

Second, on the part where he tells her to learn her place, you may want to add a bit more reason for him to consider her, um, what's the word? Persistent? No, I think rebellious. . . .Idk, my vocab. doesn't work at night, lol.

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Today​​​​​​​, Edward Miller would secure a deal with ~some other country~ for billions of dollars in exchange for his highest medics.

You place a coma after "Today."