Board Thread:Short Stories and Fanfictions/@comment-109.161.162.101-20191116154638/@comment-109.161.168.119-20191126142229

''I know this is not progressing the story, just like I know that this is short and not as interesting as your ideas. But I’ll post this and move on.''

“Look who’s back!” Linh sang as Tam walked through the door. He was greeted with a sudden splash of water in the face, and an innocent grin from his twin sister. Light burned his eyes through the huge windows that were supposed to be closed, and the neutral, soothing theme of the room brightened.

“Why aren’t the curtains closed?

Linh pulled a liquid cat from thin air, and it landed softly on the wooden floors, stretching in the blinding sunshine. “It was such a nice day. I couldn’t let it go to waste.” The mist swirled that around him wetted his already dripping bangs.

Tam crossed the room and plopped down into a cushioned armchair. “There isn’t anything to discuss.”

Linh pointed towards a simple table, where a round bowl hosting a tiny creature rested. “Sure there is! Look at this, Princess Purryfins is finally letting me pet her head.” She gave a demonstration, to which the murcat rewarded her with a throaty purr. “And we could talk about how your date went—”

“It wasn’t a date!” he insisted.

“Oh yes it was, don’t you even try to deny it. Biana’s not as oblivious as Sophie is, she knows that you like her.” She narrowed her eyes, and when they flew open with realization he wanted to curl up in a ball and wait for the world to pass by. “Are you blushing?”

He shouted, “NO!” a second before Linh burst into a fit of giggles. Two white staircases on either side of the giant room led to a sort of balcony, showcasing towering bookshelves that cast shadows above on the wall; Tam quickly gathered them and shrouded his face.

“Aww, you’re growing up so fast!” Linh said, floating water up to her eyes that she wiped as if they were teary.

“I swear Linh, you’re gonna wish you never—”

The simple ringing of his imparter interrupted his threat, and he clicked open.

You have an incoming hail from: Biana Vacker

 

Tam groaned. She couldn’t have chosen a worse time to hail.

Linh peeked over his shoulder and gave a perfect, smug smile that showed all of the teeth that Tam wanted to break. He waited for her to leave as the ringing continued, but she wouldn’t take a step towards the door.

“What are you waiting for?

“Oh, fine,” she finally said, after he’d stared at her for long enough that it was too uncomfortable to ignore. With a flick of her long ebony hair, she stomped off.

He received the hail, and Biana’s face popped up.

“…Hi Tam.”

Tam looked down. “Hi.”

Biana carefully placed a section of hair behind her ears. “Um…I know this is very soon to talk again, but you forgot your sweater here.”

“Oh! Oh. I guess I could go and get it, maybe,” he tried.

“Yeah, you could. And then maybe, we could…go to Atlantis!”

Tam’s head shot up, and he noticed his sister’s shadow and her shameless eye peeking through the door. He cast a sharp shadow at her and whispered, “You are dead to me.” He then cracked the knuckles that he started staring at again as he asked, “Now? Like, now, now? Weren’t we just together?”

“Well yes,” Biana admitted, “but I thought maybe we could hang out a little more. My parents wouldn’t mind.”

He told Biana, “Okay. I’ll just…tell Linh.”

Biana nodded awkwardly, and she clicked away.

Tam threw back his head and fell to the ground on his back, covering his face with his hands.

“Why am I so stupid? I’m so stupid, everything’s stupid, and you, Princess Purryfins, are especially stupid!”

“How dare you,” Linh scolded, sauntering into the room.

“Oh, and you too,” he added sourly.

She rolled her eyes and sat cross-legged onto the floor. “Stop being a grump and get on with your second date in a row.”

“You’re a dirty eavesdropper, you know that?”

“Yeah, I do.”

Tam snarled a word that she definitely heard. She flicked some water at his face and pulled his lazy bottom off the floor. “C’mon,” she beckoned. “Let’s get you suited up.”

I said not soon, but I had some time so…voila. Just like before, I probably won’t continue this. This was not good in my opinion. My reasons are:


 * It was done too hastily


 * It’s faster paced than it should be


 * There is too much dialogue (since there’s nothing else to write about.


 * It doesn’t add anything worthwhile to the story whatsoever. K I’m done.

-Lady Sassyfur