Talk:Keefe and Sophie/@comment-38433042-20190219154623/@comment-35087380-20190219155832

Overall, it's awesome! I hope you don't mind a few critiques.

First, show, not tell. What I mean is instead of telling us about Sophie's emotions, try to show them. Use descriptive words.

Next, add spaces between lines. Like when a character speaks, click return to go down a space. Try to paraphrase like that, as it make it easier to read and much less likely a reader will skim.

Again, I hope you don't mind my criticism!