Board Thread:Short Stories and Fanfictions/@comment-43347423-20200111144721/@comment-43612077-20200208235519

I really enjoy your writing style! I wish there were a few more visual descriptions, but otherwise, it’s great! So, a couple of pointers for the future: 1. As much as I LOVE Sokeefe, the way their relationship progressed was very fast. As soon aa Keefe woke up, Sophie started having a lot more heart flutters, etc. which changed the whole characterization of the Sophie and Keefe relationship. 2. Fitz’s behaviour was a bit off- he seemed angry at the start for no particular reason- and yeah, it’s Fitz, but he seemed pretty chill at the end of Legacy, though I have no idea what would happen if Sophie started dating Keefe. One more thing I have to add is that the first part of your story seemed very ship based- but that’s mainly okay, since Shannon is going to have to confront that eventually. Overall, great job, and keep up the good work!