Board Thread:Short Stories and Fanfictions/@comment-2601:647:4000:5CE0:B4BD:4BD8:218D:2B1A-20191021195908/@comment-2601:647:4000:5CE0:9434:3616:4079:F2D2-20191022002230

Chicken tornado wrote: It's pretty good! The only thing I could say is that your paragraphs are a little confusing. Two different people can't speak in the same paragraph. Other than that, though, it's great. I apoligize if I make two or more people speak in later paragraphs... the thing is kind of new. Thanks!