Board Thread:Clubs/@comment-44390494-20200109205641/@comment-109.161.168.250-20200202181703

Remember to have an enter space whenever a new character starts speaking. And commas are important in speech as well. Take this sentence an example:

After about 3 hours of wandering around I say out loud “I give up”.

If it's the end of the sentence, the punctuation always goes inside the quotation marks, unless it's a semicolon. And there would be a comma after loud. I don't know why, English is weird. The sentence would look like this:

'''After about three hours of wandering around, I say out loud, "I give up." '''

I think that you should let the readers know that she is a wolf earlier on. When she locked her wound at first I was very confused. Try for a little more sentence variation, instead of using "I" at the start of a sentence all the time.

Anyways, good job!

-Lady Sassyfur