Board Thread:Clubs/@comment-44390494-20200109205641/@comment-38544901-20200209194645

That's really good.

Have you read it alound to yourself, when I did that it seemed like certain parts didn't flow as well as they could of. So my only suggestion is read it aloud and make sure it flows, maybe have other people read it to you as well just to get a better idea of how others read it.

The one stanza with five lines the fifth line feels like it was added on later and it feels a bit forced sorry if that doesn't make sense.