Board Thread:Short Stories and Fanfictions/@comment-45011134-20200209061433/@comment-44540575-20200209064221

I think my only criticism for the storyline is its choppiness and pacing. You were doing well pacing throughout the story, but it feels like you almost rushed the ending. There are also some choppy parts. For example, Tuck's parents seem to go from one extreme to another. I think you need to add a bit more of a transition for them.