Thread:CustardBursts/@comment-34026531-20181117033221/@comment-34026531-20181117061127

I'm sorry for wasting your time, but it's just a bit harder for me to understand because it's referring back to his dad because the word Dex is stated then it says "his dad." It's a vague pronoun, and someone might not understand it so if we link it then they would know? Or you could write Kesler in the sentence, but it looks worse. It's just a suggestion, but if you don't feel like it fits then I understand.

"Dex finds them adorable, and wants his dad to get one to keep at Slurps and Burps to clean the shelves." - original

"Dex finds them adorable, and wants his dad, Kesler, to get one to keep at Slurps and Burps to clean the shelves." - modified no.1 with Kesler added in

"Dex finds them adorable, and wants his dad to get one to keep at Slurps and Burps to clean the shelves." - modified no.2 to clarify who his dad is.