Board Thread:Short Stories and Fanfictions/@comment-39312933-20190506173125/@comment-37609893-20190517124538

Good job on the writing part. I reaaaaaally don’t want to be rude, but this made me like Sokeefe less. You portrayed Fitz as an absolute jerk. He wouldn’t just, give up on the person he loves. Nobody does that, and Fitz doesn’t seem like he would. Also, you made Keefe seem needy. He just grabbed Sophie like she was some object and kissed her may I add in front of Fitz. I find that kinda rude, and I know it’s your fan fiction, but it bothered me :/